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A Sonnet to the Overlooked by ~Evrius:iconEvrius:



Although she lives her life a friend to all,
She hasn’t caught a single breath of love,
She’s living off the care from all her friends,
But dying from romantic lack thereof,
She is a wave, a constant, always there,
Until tsunamis push her out of reach,
An overshadowed friend, unseen by love,
And she’ll, dejected, crash upon the beach,
When life seems dim and all love seems to fade,
She is a lantern, always burning; there,
But cast asunder for a simple match,
A phony love, a rapidly doused flare,
She will wait, a postulated friend,
Until true love will find her in the end.
©2005-2009 ~Evrius
:iconevrius:

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This is a sonnet I wrote for everyone who is always only a friend.

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:iconandyjb42:
That is really a good poem...nice work

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:iconmargiejones:
thanks nate

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"if your not living life on the edge, you're taking up too much space."
:iconttotheerra:
whoa, thats awesome, me gusta mucho, definitely!

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Some things are the way they are

and words just can't explain
:iconrhetoric-ritual:
Great work. Easy to relate to.
:icontwoheadedgirl:
I like it, especially the lines about the tsunami and the beach. They create good imagery. I always have a hard time with that in my poems because they're mostly about emotions and junk.
:iconrunofthemill:
Very good sonnet.. And I say sonnet because you really do follow strict rhyme scheme and meter. I can't say that for a lot of writers in the sonnet section who loosely, if lucky, follow one of those.

I like the paradox you throw in line 3-4 "She’s living off the care from all her friends / But dying from romantic lack thereof" . I'm not sure if "constant" is the best way to describe a wave, as it is a transient phenomena (there's no static wave per se), but that's just me being picky.

Good job

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